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    Author: iluvpoetry_1
    Elite Ratio:    2.87 - 806/439/119
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 1240
    Average Vote:    2.0000
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       i dont like it jess dont like it but jess said someone might!!
    ~akaila~


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    dotsVanisheddots
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    Vanished in thin air
    All left to see
    Wash the desrted desert fields
    Large cactus and tumble weeds

    No streetlight was in order
    Not even the coyotes howled

    Clouds began to form
    Lighting began to strike
    Thunder began to roar
    As the wind grew stronger and stronger

    Rain begins to plummet from the sky
    Moon shined with an eerie white gray light
    Shinning mysteriously across the desert island

    Nothing stirred as the land watched mother nature take over.

    ~akaila~







    Submitted on 2006-08-04 12:17:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is very good.I love poetry about rain! This one made me feel as though I were there watching mother Nature do her work!!!

    GBY! :)
    | Posted on 2006-08-04 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]


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