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Vanished


Author: iluvpoetry_1
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Words: 92
Class/Type: Poetry /Nature
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i dont like it jess dont like it but jess said someone might!!
~akaila~


Vanished



Vanished in thin air
All left to see
Wash the desrted desert fields
Large cactus and tumble weeds

No streetlight was in order
Not even the coyotes howled

Clouds began to form
Lighting began to strike
Thunder began to roar
As the wind grew stronger and stronger

Rain begins to plummet from the sky
Moon shined with an eerie white gray light
Shinning mysteriously across the desert island

Nothing stirred as the land watched mother nature take over.

~akaila~







Submitted on 2006-08-04 12:17:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this is very good.I love poetry about rain! This one made me feel as though I were there watching mother Nature do her work!!!

GBY! :)
| Posted on 2006-08-04 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]


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