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    dots Submission Name: Dear Avidots
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    Author: irish storm
    ASL Info:    17/m/hawaii
    Elite Ratio:    4.14 - 94/107/29
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 194
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 1303



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       i suck at these types. but be honest and let me know what you think.


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    dotsDear Avidots
    -------------------------------------------


    I tried writing a love poem for you,
    but it only turned out bad.
    You see I kept repeating how much I love you,
    so I tossed it away... not knowing there was something in that piece.
    You see I squandered many a night thinking what would make you happy to read.
    I thought alot about the times we shared so far and whats the future holds.
    Nothing came to mind.
    I put alot of corny lines and "i love you's" in the mix,
    but when I read it... all it said was "Blah"
    My hand hurt from writing and my head hurt from thinking.
    I was caught in Writers Block when trying to to express my feelings on paper.
    Thats when I know my solution.
    You see love cannot be delivered by adjectives or nouns,
    nor verbs or sentences.
    Love cannot take 3mins to write down.
    I revised my thinking.

    Love is holding you and watching the sun set behind the concrete jungle.
    Love is kissing you on the neck and foreheard,
    when Im too lazy to makeout
    Love is having sex, even though so far I suck.
    Love is Avi.
    My love spelt that way
    So I guess I love you, and I wanted you to know that.

    -Sincerly Daniel

    ps: write back




    Submitted on 2006-08-04 14:59:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      trying to be nice with that vote there dude.
    | Posted on 2006-08-04 00:00:00 | by psyko | [ Reply to This ]



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