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    dots Submission Name: Requiem's Enddots
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    Author: xeternalshadowx
    ASL Info:    17/m/pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    4.72 - 121/137/55
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsRequiem's Enddots
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    5:16

    When all that's left is vengeance,
    And peace a staple of mind,
    Your misery became my nectar;
    I drank until I die.

    Blood bore the flower
    Upon Earthless prison walls,
    Tears in the veil ov grace
    And chords outstretched beneath.

    Black is the blanket of the midnight sky;
    Vanity trapped,
    Stones set in place,
    Ashes arise and serenity,
    Face to face.

    Seek no ocean.
    Wish no spirit.
    Close the open caskets.




    Submitted on 2006-08-04 16:00:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this. I could feel emotion or something coming off of it when i was reading it and it flowed really good and the wording was great. i wish i had something you could change about it but i dont think there really is. My favorite 2 stanza's are.....

    Black is the blanket of the midnight sky;
    Vanity trapped,
    Stones set in place,
    Ashes arise and serenity,
    Face to face.

    Seek no ocean.
    Wish no spirit.
    Close the open caskets.

    I dont know why but they are. I feel in a way its like i know all of this or something. great write. keep it up

    Tatum
    | Posted on 2006-08-05 00:00:00 | by spikerz1621 | [ Reply to This ]


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