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ANSWERS a tanka


Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
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Words: 107
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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this is true love redone


ANSWERS a tanka



To see my lover
I've gone a thousand miles
and came back alone.
Racing to the horizon,
I circled the world for him.


To find my true self
I've asked a thousand questions
and found even more.
Had to examine each thought
Answers were all in riddles

To find inner peace
I have had to close my eyes
and turn off the noise.
Serenity and prayer
washed and covered me in light

Then I found myself
and my true love came to me.
inner peace stayed too.
Each day I take a moment
To breath, listen and to pray.




Submitted on 2006-08-04 21:38:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a vast improvement with you adding more details and changing the title. I liked the fact you looked within to find truth and love and then loved your true love. It was well written and accurate in what one most do to enjoy love in this life and keep. This was very good, and I'm glad you took the time out to revise this. Good work!

Catrina
| Posted on 2006-09-08 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
  the inner love was yourself with God? very true, you can travel miles and have questions with some answers, but never enough to know the real love. great poem
a favorite peace
| Posted on 2006-08-20 00:00:00 | by thelastone | [ Reply to This ]
  This has a very dreamlike and serene quality. I wouldn't say that it was absolutely brilliant, but it was fairly good.
| Posted on 2006-08-05 00:00:00 | by Lacrimosa | [ Reply to This ]


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