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Angel of the night

Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 102
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Angel of the night

Different name
Same gam
I smile
Only for a while
then back to pain
alone and crying again
but a giding light
my angel of the night
opens my eyes so i can see
pain is not a thing for me
tells me love's not this way
and it's all gonna be okay
in his hands he holds my shattered heart
and carefully restores every part
but he disapears when i hold out my hand
and im left lost trying to understand
shy is he?
or is it me?
he's not real it seems
but he is to me in my dreams...

Submitted on 2006-08-05 01:23:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a really good poem, it kind of reminded me of the Phantom of the Opera mostly with the title being "Angel of the Night". There's a few ways you can take this poem. I thought of almost a guardian angel protecting this person. They're so hurt by love they've seem to lost thir way. This angel portects this person and comforts them like a security blanket. Overall this is a great read, the only suggestion I have is the second line "Same gam" I think you meant "Same gam(e)" I could be wrong though. Great job though, keep up the good work! :)

| Posted on 2006-08-05 00:00:00 | by my_worst_fear85 | [ Reply to This ]

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