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    dots Submission Name: Sea of Black Dawndots

    Author: xeternalshadowx
    ASL Info:    17/m/pennsylvania
    Elite Ratio:    4.72 - 121/137/55
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       another rewrite...this could be interpreted many ways.

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    dotsSea of Black Dawndots


    Waves of blood wash upon the innocent shore,
    Agues cower in the ever morbid wake...

    It was here
    That I was jettisoned over the edge
    Into the depths
    Of an absymal ridge.

    The cast of flames perpetuate upward
    And shadow the glare of the humble sun...

    It was here
    That the bowels of a broken soul
    Leaked through
    Into a seismic breach.

    Graveless spirits seek their providence
    And wish to uphold their divine right.
    Miles into a cold dark abyss,
    Fate is in just one's hands.

    Cavities of bone and flesh strung in between,
    The Apollyon spawn climaxes.
    This is the evolution of the mortal sin.

    Sea of Black Dawn.

    [The Chimera of symbolized faith]

    Generations collapse within the crimson void
    And succumb to midnight depths.

    It was here
    That life was declared an anomaly
    In one breath.

    It was here
    That Hell succumbed to midnight depths,
    Drowned and fell.

    Submitted on 2006-08-05 12:57:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is the second poem of yours I've read. Just like last time I like this one a lot. It flows pretty well and I really like your choice of words. I love the emotion and everything. I wish I could tell you stuff to change but I can't so sorry.

    Peace N Love
    | Posted on 2006-08-05 00:00:00 | by spikerz1621 | [ Reply to This ]

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