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    dots Submission Name: Theft of the Fairy-dustdots
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    Author: _taateli_
    ASL Info:    18/F/Finland
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 84/113/29
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I am almost sure that I am under the influence. There is no excuse to explain this one. I love this sh!t.


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    dotsTheft of the Fairy-dustdots
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    Che attacks me at nights!

    He frightens me with his stories
    about Fidel and his cigars
    And then he arranges tea-parties
    In my wardrobe;

    A fictional character, come up with one, quickly!

    They’re all welcome
    really,
    “Please, bring the flavour you yearn”,
    it says on the invitation,
    “and several pots of tea”

    And when Che puts the kettle on,
    a decent conversation
    can begin.

    But then –
    Alice has already spilled her tea
    and Winnie has switched to honey (or is it weed?)

    Anyway –
    finally they all
    simply pour it all
    what I need
    in my cup of Tea.
    It lifts you (no, me!) up in the air

    The genius behind Che;
    Freedom –

    'Tis merely imagination.

    “But why so panicked,
    Peter Panic?”




    Submitted on 2006-08-05 15:14:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      alice in wonderland, drugs...
    ha righto...
    this is in fact excellent...it made me laugh and stole a smile from me, so obviously i adore it...
    very..."not like other things on this site" escpecially now a days...its complete bull [censored] on here for the most part...
    yours i great love it

    rha////////
    | Posted on 2006-12-13 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      i love your mind.
    it makes me feels all squiggles inside.
    even when you write 'incoherently' it still makes a sort of sense...
    i get the feel of the poem along with the meaning and hidden truths...
    we all know winnie was a hookah-tokin', pot-smokin' pooh bear...

    and i'm not even going to start on lewis carroll...
    you read mad gone alice...
    you know i know my history!
    :)

    this is fantastic.
    i could see Che moving about, putting on tea and telling fantastical horror stories...
    needs no improvement.
    it captures the calm before the mania so perfectly.
    *md*
    | Posted on 2006-10-28 00:00:00 | by MerryDeath | [ Reply to This ]
      [Theft of the Fairy-dust]
    -------------------------------------------

    Che attacks me at nights!

    He frightens me with his stories
    about Fidel and his cigars
    And then he arranges tea-parties
    In my wardrobe;

    A fictional character, come up with one, quickly!

    They’re all welcome
    really,
    “Please, bring the flavour you yearn”,
    it says on the invitation,
    “and several pots of tea”

    And when Che puts the kettle on,
    a decent conversation
    can begin.

    But then –
    Alice has already spilled her tea
    and Winnie has switched to honey (or is it weed?)

    Anyway –
    finally they all
    simply pour it all
    what I need
    in my cup of Tea.
    It lifts you (no, me!) up in the air

    The genius behind Che;
    Freedom –

    'Tis merely imagination.

    “But why so panicked,
    Peter Panic?”


    Che appears mighty spry for someone dead so long (it must be the powdered sweetener that makes his tea so unusual; the taste of both freedom and delusion in a single pot). This reads like a tongue-in-cheek homage to Lewis Carrol via cannabis, cocaine, the ghosts of communism and lunacy. Very fine, lunacy, by the way.

    Gorgeously insane.
    Take care.
    Bill.
    | Posted on 2006-08-06 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      yes i can see the infuence of what you have just read in all this. loved the controversy of winnie the pooh, but did you ever notice that it was shaggy and scooby that show the most signs of being drug addicts. they always have munchies, and what is really in those scooby snacks?
    keep up the (insane) writing. you should try it without being under the influence some time.
    you write much more coherent stuff. :)
    | Posted on 2006-08-05 00:00:00 | by eowyn | [ Reply to This ]


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