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    dots Submission Name: welcome to the hot nightsdots

    Author: the nerdbomb
    ASL Info:    15/F/right here
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 49/73/63
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotswelcome to the hot nightsdots

    welcome to the hot nights
    where the grass feels like ashes on your bare back
    when moths fly like moon white sparks
    on the ground, we are the flames in the dark.

    ceiling fan's creak sounds beautiful
    against the cacophony of breaths and sighs
    the air is to thick to think
    to think of any think more beautiful

    the moons paper face gleams through the window
    guiding your hands to where they should go
    the toads throats lead the band of green noise
    and battles the band of white noise that pulls you into sleep

    Submitted on 2006-08-05 15:16:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Bar a few minor spelling errors, this creates a scene that brings me into a hot night, I can feel the heat you describe, I can hear the sounds and those wonderful images like "the moons paper face" Awesome, just awesome!!

    | Posted on 2006-08-06 00:00:00 | by steffunni | [ Reply to This ]

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