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    dots Submission Name: your enddots
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    Author: dark figure
    ASL Info:    17/m/uk
    Elite Ratio:    4.19 - 66/74/29
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 161
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 434



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    dotsyour enddots
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    your close
    so close you can feel it
    but your hearts broken
    and nothing can heal it

    your end is near
    still full of fear
    no one cares no one hears

    your on your own
    your minds still prone
    and your emotions have been out grown

    your end has come
    the pains only begun
    as your soul is dismantled from this world....





    Submitted on 2006-08-05 17:55:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      it's great!i relate to this differently but i can understand what you were thinking when you wrote this.
    Jenn
    | Posted on 2006-08-11 00:00:00 | by bbcherry | [ Reply to This ]
      its great i mean how you wrote this its sad but its easly understood and able to relate to. but i feel it needs more.. maybe i'm simply being greedy.. but it seems unfinished as if thers more.. more thoughts ... more feelings.. something... just an idea anyhow great work !!

    ~*Jackie*~
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent! Fantastic! The flow was spot on. the words felt very real and from the heart. I rarely give such compliments, but I feel you've earned them. I'll be looking forward to you next poem.
    | Posted on 2006-08-06 00:00:00 | by hollowpain | [ Reply to This ]
      wow thats all i can say and that it is extremely good and i love it dude and i am serious too.

    my favorite part was

    "your end has come
    the pains only begun
    as your soul is dismantled from this world...."

    and it is really sad

    Fana
    | Posted on 2006-08-05 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      its very spiffy, sad, yes, but spiffy
    | Posted on 2006-09-07 00:00:00 | by blu_kittin | [ Reply to This ]



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