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    dots Submission Name: I'm Just Your Frienddots
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    Author: Foreseer
    ASL Info:    20/F/In Love
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 156/86/23
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1126
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 596



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    dotsI'm Just Your Frienddots
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    I'm just your friend,
    your eyes tell me that.
    I won't say anything,
    that points to more than that.

    I'll keep my feelings to myself
    and let you live away from.
    I hope one day you'll see
    the other side that comes from me.

    I just can't stand the fact
    that you fall for her again.
    I thought you saw behind
    that fake mask of pain?

    But I love you,
    just saying it to myself
    because you'll never know,
    even though I would wish it so.




    Submitted on 2006-08-06 20:06:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like it..never heard anything like it before....
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by JustHuman | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought it flowed really well. The theme is a classical tale of love and wanting waiting to be realised by one, but not the other. Hope all works well and remember, true love always prevails.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      good write...a little bumpy to read, but good. keep writing...
    </3 lisa
    | Posted on 2006-08-06 00:00:00 | by 777sacrites777 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is super good
    esp. cause you can feel the emotion behind the words
    as if you where speaking them
    | Posted on 2006-08-25 00:00:00 | by Evonna Findley | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this and i know exactly how you feel...i cant ever tell him i love him cuz he justs wants to be friends so yeah it hurts....but anyway really really good job i likes this a lot...totally going on my favs list!

    Brittany
    | Posted on 2006-08-18 00:00:00 | by dark_secrets_ | [ Reply to This ]
      love sucks sometimes doesn't it? well just stoped by to tell you your doing a wonderful job and your poetry is getting real good!!!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-12-07 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]


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