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promise to love me forever?


Author: Scribbles1338
ASL Info:    18/Female/St. Louis
Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 169 /167 /37
Words: 146
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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my boyfriend gave me a beautiful promise ring before i go away to college...


promise to love me forever?



breathing quietly
i stare at the thin gold band
that you have placed so boldly
around my finger

i look you in the eyes,
so innocent and alive
and i honestly promise
to love you forever

we talk of love and happiness
maybe we'll get engaged soon
you say that you want so much
you want to grow old with me

i smile at your passion
only if we can be cute old people
the kind that still hold hands
while at the grocery store

i love you, i do
and i want to one day marry you
but it all seems so, so far away
and we both seem so young

i stare at the little diamond
i wonder what it will feel like
to wear an actual engaement ring
i can't wait until the day i really do




Submitted on 2006-08-06 21:01:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  to start with, bad english on the description. read it out aloud, and see if you can find the problem.
the topic seems to have jumped a little, so perhaps this piece is incomplete.
i really do hope things work out for you.
do you live together or not. i live with my BF, i got kicked out of home, so his family took me in, then his family started getting problems, that he swears arent related to me, and we both had to leave there. i had 3 adresses in 1 year. it was a real strain on me, and a real strain on our relationship, being such a stresful time.
its ok, most of the time, but i feel almost like we are getting sick of eachother.
not your problem though.
one warning i have, is the whole young engagement thing. ive seen perfect couples, who struggle with thier relationship, just because they got engaged. im not saying dont do it, but dont let yourself think that it is the be all and end all, and it will control you. like my friend did.
rememebr to keep your eyes wide open, and your heart from wandering

evelyn
| Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by eowyn | [ Reply to This ]


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