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    dots Submission Name: You('re) (Star)Lightdots

    Author: throughmyvoice
    ASL Info:    19/f/US of A
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 69/113/51
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       summer school. trigonometry.


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    dotsYou('re) (Star)Lightdots

    And if I could
    I'd lasso the moon
    (Then) eat a piece of its pie
    And watch the stars, (as they corner the night)
    (Their light) twinkling in your eyes

    (To) think of the high sky
    So impossibly high
    How tangible it seems to breach
    So simple to stroke the gradation of colors
    And (hindered) prayers
    In the birthplace of rain
    And (broken) dreams

    (And to) watch your face
    As the world lights up to blaze
    Illuminated by glowing (smiles and) stoplights
    Despair smoldering behind the wake of your rays
    The infinity in the tunnel (masquerading) as light

    But it's in the midst
    Of the traffic and fog
    That I suddenly realize
    In order to reach for the stars
    (In order) to become God
    All I need is to wish upon your (starlight) eyes

    Submitted on 2006-08-07 03:40:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Aww...this is soo sweet, you are looking for the world, and the keys of the universe, and you realize that it's in the eyes of the person you love. This is incrdibl sweet, I love it so much. It's not the Universe, jjust your own, because everyone has their own, and in your universe, her eyes are the stars. Really is a marvelous analogy, indeed. Not much more to say, but more love for this. Great write!!!
    Walk in Love and Light,
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]
      I think I'm finally starting to understand what it means...

    And as I understand it, it grows more beautiful...

    You are sitting near some traffic intersection, and there is a tunnel close by...

    The lights from the stars twinkle in your lover's eyes, and you are so exalted you feel you can touch the rainbow( or something like that in the sky), where the rains originate (and dreams are broken?How?)

    The lights from the stoplights (and the cars or the sun?Is it dawn?) play across your lover's grand face, and every where your lover's light ceases to be there is despair... A light is coming through the tunnel (a train?) but it seems false imitator compared to your lover's starlight...

    And then you realize, even amongst the dusty chaos, all you have to do to become God is reach for the divine starlight in his eyes...

    My interpretation is probably all Ddgfckdsfy,
    so just have fun!!

    And tell me the interpretation if you can...

    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by albery rinash | [ Reply to This ]

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