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    dots Submission Name: bastard braindots
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    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsbastard braindots
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    dreams of seperate realities
    tap dance on my forehead
    their feet moving to inconsistent rhythms
    drawn randomly from a hat
    inspiration comes in all sizes, or so i'm told,
    so the sun must be setting in the valley
    as peyoteros throw their heads
    into the red desert sand,
    trying to save themselves
    from the great anticipated storm.

    visions of seperate worlds can be seen
    on the gas tank of a
    red car to the right of me
    i sit alone
    writing the greatest book of all time
    so this must be hell, i tell myself
    after looking across a melting vacant parking lot

    yet the one memory that sticks out
    is one of me
    running through an empting parking garage
    my feet making
    slapping noises against the smooth concrete
    creating paralells
    to the beating of my heart




    Submitted on 2006-08-07 03:47:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I enjoyed this, surprisingly. Usually, freeform poetry's written by funny little inchoates in tight clothes. This was set apart from all that, of course. I've but one little complaint.

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    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by Lacrimosa | [ Reply to This ]


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