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    dots Submission Name: Virginity's Secretdots
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    Author: BlueHeart
    ASL Info:    14/M/NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.85 - 14/24/19
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 813
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1178



    Description:
       Mason inspires me to write poetry again. You can give advice but I'm not going to change it becase it expresses my true love for him


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    dotsVirginity's Secretdots
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    Lies Untold, Secrets Unfold
    Hopefully forever, our love will stay
    Enchanting lust, his feeling a must
    Under my warmth he will lay

    Sweet pleasure, safe sacrifice
    Trading security fo freedom
    Our souls bound together
    Fate of another, feelings numb

    Unwritten our passion
    Now published by fate
    Our love is forever
    a....drowsy-like state

    Passion burning, sweet desire
    Under his warmth I will lye
    His heart's fire I acquire
    He's the apple of my eye

    His voice makes me tremble
    His touch makes me weak
    I dream of his feeling
    He makes my heart speak

    Our connection? The stars
    Our galaxy of love
    The glow of our moon,
    as white as a dove

    Our love set free
    Ready to fly
    I hear his soul speak
    A natural high

    His eyes, sweet ecstasy
    His body, my desire
    I want him inside me
    Past of my attire

    Consumed by my mind
    I'm dependent on you
    Forever our love
    My faith is to you




    Submitted on 2006-08-07 08:54:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really pretty Danni
    I like how you expressed your Love for your partner
    I can feel the emotion and I also feel like this is a relationship that will last forever
    One can tell that you two truthfully feel true Love for each other
    You didnot get too graphic with this write which I do appreciate
    There was no reason to as you made your point perfectly with the words used
    Excellent Job!!!
    God Bless
    Ron

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    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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