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    dots Submission Name: Don't You Know How the Universe Works?dots

    Author: FarawayFeelings
    ASL Info:    16/F/Mia
    Elite Ratio:    0.93 - 159/74/72
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Just something i came up with. how do you liek it?

    >Ac/Cable *VACANCY* Thoughts Welcome.<

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    dotsDon't You Know How the Universe Works?dots

    Stars are massive,
    and we ourselves, as planets aren't,
    yet we look at them as if,
    they are our sights to see,
    as if that was their entire reason for existing,
    well did we ever ask them?

    Did we ask them if they wanted a set place in the night sky?Did we ask them if twinkling, in some hope that we will be caught by their timelessness,was really what they wished to do?

    I would say they would be less willing if we had asked, And I still say they don't all follow the rules.

    I think some of them move around while we watch them, just to fool with us. And I think sometimes they take on the size at which they are viewed (I think they're making some kind of statement.), and hitchhike on a raindrop during a storm.

    And sometimes I wonder how it ended it up, that you could live on this earth and never have met one.

    Submitted on 2006-08-07 10:38:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love stars. so you got kudos just for that :)
    | Posted on 2006-08-10 00:00:00 | by yellow balloons | [ Reply to This ]
      Eh... you've got a very big face, darling. Resize it down a little for us, would you. That picture takes away space from the poem eh?

    First impressions, eh?

    Huh... well, honestly, I never really viewed stars from a Sadomasochistic perspective... but I guess if that's your thing...

    but seriously, your poem is scattered. Find a meaning or idea and put it there, don't vaguely propose questions all over the place without answering them, (implicitly or otherwise... you can answer a question just by asking that, but you don't do that here) Give us perspective, not puzzles, darling.
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by Mop_box | [ Reply to This ]

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