Description: Dont even say this poem dosent have enough emotion or its too short b/c it has plenty of emotion and I took time on it. If you dont like it fuck you. lol if you do coment it and tell me wut you thought:) ps. ignore the few spellin errors i no of them
Passing Through -------------------------------------------
I think I'll just lay here.
Ignoring tears of imperfection as they fall from my tainted eyes.
But as I lay immoble, seperate from everything else.
A smile crosses my beaten face,
and in that moment, all the pain went away.
All the memories of my past life dissapeard
and I was free.
My soul passed into another world,
as my broken bones desintigrated into the ground and my flesh was picked at by ravens.
I was on a ride to a better place, Hell.
A poem is never too short or too emotionless. I think it's great just the way it is. It's very interesting, the good way, it makes you wonder. Especially the last line.
I was on another ride to a better place, Hell.
Really makes you wonder about your own life. Anyway good job on the piece.
well jjust to tell you it has alot of emotion and its not too short i actually liked it alot really
you can really understand it because it has a litte bit of bluntness.
"I think I'll just lay here. Ignoring tears of imperfection as they fall from my tainted eyes. But as I lay immoble, seperate from everything else. A smile crosses my beaten face"
i raelly like the beginning it kind of puts you in the mode of the poem.
Submission Name: Passing Through
