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    dots Submission Name: Pretty, In A Dressdots
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    Author: throughmyvoice
    ASL Info:    19/f/US of A
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 69/113/51
    Words: 708
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 568
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 4527



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    dotsPretty, In A Dressdots
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    The melody caught me off guard
    It was a song I never expected to hear out loud
    Only to see glimpses of the notes on illegible music sheets
    Only to hear the harmony being hummed in a deluging crowd
    The notes would linger in my head
    And sometimes would downpour out my mouth
    In a monsoon of music, lovely in its finesse
    But I never thought Iíd see the song sitting next to me
    Especially in a dress
    And sometimes, when life chooses to overwhelm me
    When twists and heavy suffering occur
    With a weight that breaks my eyes and causes leaks
    A weight that my shoulders have to endure
    When the devil raises his voice to speak
    Thatís when I speak to her
    So laughter can become the theme song to life
    And the sky becomes painted in saturated sunsets,
    Exploding with color
    That catch your breath so effortless
    Those sunsets make me think of her for a moment
    And momentarily the world makes sense
    The path to my peace of mind becomes less impossible
    Because my purpose is visible;
    And therefore, made plausible
    My sanity given back to me
    Because she is living in the same reality
    I am given a second chance simply through a hug
    I am given chance at hope through a car ride of love
    Itís when understanding is able to wrap its arms around you and giggle
    Suddenly, life has meaning
    And instead of wishing away today, you look for the next
    Because a reason for living is sitting beside you
    Sitting, in a pretty dress
    Time is given simply to take and pause it
    To take measure of all that seems important
    And disregard it
    To truly notice what truly matters
    And realize pain isnít worth the time to feel
    And happiness has more appeal
    Life is that much sweeter, when you know
    You can eventually get to know it
    And the meaning of it all counteracts continual stress
    Because the meaningís sitting next to you
    So pretty, in a dress
    Conversation occurs in colors
    In motions, in haze, in touches and gestures
    Our thoughts belong to each other
    Because we are both watching the world from the same perch
    The one that overlooks the ocean and peeks at a miniature map
    On which roads lead to the peace for which we all search
    That hot wheels drive on, in endless laps
    We speak in music, in poetry and stories
    We breathe in reflections, and out memories
    We pause to feel the earth spin, to observe daily glories
    Our thoughts may belong to one another
    But she is all her own
    Her thoughts are expressed through mind-altering photographs
    That speaks with pictures of all that matters to her
    Evidence of her love are written on heart-shaped post-its
    Jots of thoughtfulness, of concern and care
    And bestowed on those she chooses to hold hands with
    When walking down lifeís path,
    Prettily, in a dress
    Itís when yellow balloons float across neon colored skies
    Topped with whip-creamed clouds
    Illuminated by sunrise pies
    Itís when the ocean gets selfish
    And captures the moonís light in ripples
    That reflect in her floodlights of smiles
    And her own oceans of giggles
    Thatís when I know sheís around
    Because life becomes worth it
    Dreams are incomprehensible to her
    She doesnít require excess fantasy to complete her life
    Her life is pure imagination
    Her music is her drive
    While others analyze life through a magnifying glass
    She uses a kaleidoscope
    Make-believe is more realistic than the facts
    And when other despair because the world tends to end
    She sits and watches the moon set with her friends
    Beautiful, in her hope
    And so pretty, in a dress
    She is beautiful in every possible way
    And all the impossible ones as well
    She captures all the beauty in life, and throws it in each moment
    Live life in every moment
    Because in a moment, it can all burn to hell
    She makes the moments in life matter
    She picks up the pieces of my world when it shatters
    Sheís taught me that sometimes, itís alright to be wrong
    Sheís rescued me from myself
    This beautiful girl
    An unexpected song
    Pretty, and in a dress




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      awasome!
    very beautiful, it is romantic, lovely, and all the treasure is buried insided so i was digging verycarefully and was suprised at every discovery. After reading it all it felt like i have found something valueable and worth having it my fav.
    i liked how you used the tittle, it was very touching.
    this whole piece is so wonderful.

    In a monsoon of music, lovely in its finesse
    But I never thought Iíd see the song sitting next to me
    Especially in a dress

    i loved this simbolism, the monsoon of music , oh my god it is so much creative.

    And sometimes, when life chooses to overwhelm me
    When twists and heavy suffering occur
    With a weight that breaks my eyes and causes leaks
    A weight that my shoulders have to endure
    When the devil raises his voice to speak
    Thatís when I speak to her


    these lines give the strength to start all over again, these lines are more than some poetry lines these are eternal truth.
    well everyone has something to look upon like you said in the times of rain you go to this beautiful song dresssed to kill, i go to amy beloved guitar and darkness since these are the set of people who accepts me without any condition.

    and like your this lovely song my guitar is also very positive about life, whenever i touch it, the vibrations touch me deeply.

    well i liked your piece and i liked the way it is written, for the fact it is writtten.

    I LOVED EVERYTHING ABOUT THIS BEAUTIFUL GIRL.

    do write these sort of different things its a pleasure to read and relate to it.
    thankyou for this gift.

    bye nishant


    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by imagination | [ Reply to This ]


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