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    dots Submission Name: Some Wordsdots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSome Wordsdots
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    Some words are so close together

    they fool the eye:

    saveslave

    sharescare

    givergrieve

    amuseabuse

    hearthate

    lovelose. . .

    Some words are

    a million miles apart, like


    so


    and


    long.




    Submitted on 2006-08-07 15:37:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very nice work here. I love wordplay (cummings is a fave), and this is humorous but with a serious point lurking under the humor. A fave!

    Peace,

    Joe

    PS. You should start submitting your work if you haven't already (did we talk about this before...?)
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]
      So long huh? Yep, the longest phrase ever...

    These words are like homonyms almost, but dichotomies/paradoxes of each other. I've thought about this a lot too actually. Violin/violet/violent-- that's three words slammed together that I tried making a poem out of... thought I'd share that with you since the subject of this poem demanded I did lol.

    Not much else to say except it was a good thought to put onto paper. And relationships always have two sides to them...

    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh. I like this, I like this very much. I like how the spellings of the words are similar but there meanings are very different.
    "amusing and abusing"
    etc

    and then elongating the last two in format was a good move.

    Thank you for your comments on my writing and your right, Barbie isn't really that innocent is she?

    -Audrey Grace
    Ave atque vale
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by AlmostEloquent | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this. It wasn't really a poem, more like a thought, or blurb. I really like the astute analogies, and the 'save/slave' one really worked. Plus, I totally understand what you mean. I hate it, though, when the meanings of one of these words makes or breaks a sentence, and you remember it as something WAY different than it was written as. Thats why I like rereading books.

    I think you should give a comforting comment to 'eowyn' (the penname of a person on here) because she is really having hormone trouble. Like the 'I don't know why I'm crying' hormone trouble. I think that the more respones she gets to her journal, the better. Sorry for deviating on the subject. ANyway, I liked this. Cute, and insightful. Brava!
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by Aetha Daemon | [ Reply to This ]


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