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    dots Submission Name: WaNtEd By HiMdots
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    Author: lil_gh0st_girl
    ASL Info:    16-F-NV
    Elite Ratio:    2.59 - 32/38/21
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 986
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 599



    Description:
       its not a ryhming poem or however u spell it. just a feeling expression poem. just gimme ur thoughts.


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    dotsWaNtEd By HiMdots
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    My Thoughts.(a mess)
    My Heart. (misplaced)
    Who I thought I loved (a mistake).
    He’s more than a friend (to me).
    My truly best one (loves so deep).
    He isn’t perfect (so he thinks).
    Our friendship (forever perfect)
    Never was non-important.
    My dreams are invaded,
    ( by his lovely kiss).
    His love (I need)
    Feels complete.
    Mr. Unwanted (“mistake”)
    I don’t need him. (trash him)
    Right now (heart shattered)
    What I want (tears, my world)
    Will never want me.
    BUT
    I need him…(wanted)




    Submitted on 2006-08-07 16:57:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Lucky person you got over here whoever is the person you wrote this about, it was very nice I kind of like the second voice something I have done before myself a couple of times. It's a love hate relationship in which you love but hate the person at the same time and the person just seems not to care... like *shrugs* whatever yo kinda dumped me so I dont think I care anymore... sounds like you made a mistake though because you keep saying how much you need the person and want him in your life but he makes you feel kinda eh... nice write

    Jose J. Ortiz aka Josyman
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]


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