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    dots Submission Name: Come on Home with Medots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 427
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
    Total Views: 996
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 2555



    Description:
       Worked on it for about a week... would love some comments on it. Nice cute kinda sexual story


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    dotsCome on Home with Medots
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    I just want to know,
    if you are thinking the same thing as I,
    I want to know,
    if your body is asking you what its asking me.
    I just want to know,
    if you are thinking the same thing as I,
    I want to know,
    if your body is asking you what its asking me.

    Come on home with me,
    come on home with me,
    and let the destiny have its say,
    come on home with me,
    so I can put a smile on your face tonight.
    Come on home with me,
    come on home with me,
    and let the destiny have its say,
    come on home with me,
    so I can make you happy tonight,
    just tonight.

    If I take a look at your eyes,
    they are telling me that you want me,
    and looking down at your body enjoying,
    the figure that you possess is of a goddess.

    So going slowly,
    rubbing your hips,
    a way to begin,
    our new adventure,
    you just look great,
    under the moonlight,
    Taking my breath away tonight.

    Come on home with me,
    come on home with me,
    and let the destiny have its say,
    come on home with me,
    so I can put a smile on your face tonight.
    Come on home with me,
    come on home with me,
    and let the destiny have its say,
    come on home with me,
    so I can make you happy tonight,
    just tonight.

    You are looking for something new,
    come closer and let me just feel you,
    undress you,
    and hold you,
    Whatever you want,
    I will do,
    in bed,
    let us just do what we want to do,
    stay with me until dawn breaks way,
    let us just get heated,
    and make it burn.

    I am going to make you feel,
    just like a princess,
    I love it when you lips touch mine,
    and tonight you are going to feel,
    like you never have before, I promise.

    Just kiss me,
    touch me,
    hug me,
    don't make me wait,
    hold me,
    feel me,
    cuddle with me,
    Just can't hold myself.

    Come on home with me,
    come on home with me,
    and let the destiny have its say,
    come on home with me,
    so I can put a smile on your face tonight.
    Come on home with me,
    come on home with me,
    and let the destiny have its say,
    come on home with me,
    so I can make you happy tonight,
    just tonight.




    Submitted on 2006-08-07 17:08:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like that. Sounds like it would make a wonderful song.
    I read this earlier, but didn't feel like commenting. I must admit, it inspired my most recent poem thing.
    You're very talented.

    As always
    Wonderfully done
    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      Very sensual and romantic passion kinda thing going on here. Very nicely written and expressed, it's sexy without being too much. It's great when you have these kinds of feelings for someone and can share this experience with them. Makes me think of candlelight and champagne, a little sexy music, and lots of romance. This is a nice poem. Made me recall some nights I have had like this. I think you did a fine job with this poem. Nice work.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2006-08-24 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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