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    dots Submission Name: Greatfully Deaddots
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    Author: JustHuman
    Elite Ratio:    1.15 - 1/1/1
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsGreatfully Deaddots
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    Now I'm greatfully dead
    not like i was before
    I've grown into this cave "they" so call a casetic
    But now the worms and the bugs are slowly eating my flesh
    As the plants break through the bottom
    and my bones slowly dissolve in the water that seeps through the creeks
    Now i'm greatfully dead
    longing to be awake
    But then agian greatfully dead isn't as bad as it seems
    you make friends with the bugs
    and the plants that break through the bottom become a quilt for a body that is no longer there
    so keep living and breathing and soon you will be part of the greatfully dead




    Submitted on 2006-08-07 22:11:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Dowdy. Just dowdy. I'm sorry, but this particular poem had no appeal to me. Keep writing, though. You have some potential at least. I trust you'll get better.

    Bona fortuna.
    :)
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by Lacrimosa | [ Reply to This ]


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