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Loving the dark


Author: Doom_Hammer
ASL Info:    17/m/canada
Elite Ratio:    1.06 - 36 /41 /20
Words: 241
Class/Type: Lyrics /Gothic
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i wrote this for my friend


Loving the dark



with just one look
the world turned black
and your luminous gaze
focused on me
the world is gone
or i just can't see it
standing alone in the dark

(b)
i hear you coming
like a hunter
in the shadows
to strike out my loneliness
entering a world
that's only you and i
all the rest is darkness
to the eyes

©
oh how the dark brings
feelings into view
i just can't get over how you
bring me here and now
i'm loving the dark
around you and i

with one touch
you brought me
to my knees
and only then did i ever
want to please
with this morbid mind
from dark passing time

(b)
the hands that
wake my senses
reach into my heart
pulling at the darkness
that's tearing at my mind
leaving the feeling
that dark is good

©
oh how the dark brings
feelings into view
i just can't get over how you
bring me here and now
i'm loving the dark
around you and i

take me to
your secret land
dont leave me here
where i can't stand
let me see what hides inside
your precious heart
to which i now thrive


loving the dark
loving the dark
sweet dark
our dark
this dark
loving the dark

loving the dark -kari villa
© :kari villa
date:July 27, 2006, 03:51:am




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  Nice one I love your work man you have too get an album out so I can buy it and isten to these songs.

FreeBird
| Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by FreeBird | [ Reply to This ]
  Ok, I'm gonna be a complete dickwad and go over this with a spellchecking comb... since you said you didn't have one on your computer lol...

with just one look
the world turned black
and your luminous gaze
focused on me
the world is gone
or i just can't see it
standing alone in the dark

(b)
i hear you coming
like a hunter
in the shadows
to strike out my loneliness
entering a world
that's only you and i
all the rest is darkness
to the eyes

©
oh how the dark brings
feelings into view
i just can't get over how you
bring me here and now
i'm loving the dark
around you and i

with one touch
you brought me
to my knees
and only then did i ever
want to please
with this morbid mind
from dark passing time

(b)
the hands that
wake my senses
reach into my heart
pulling at the darkness
that's tearing at my mind
leaving the feeling
that dark is good

©
oh how the dark brings
feelings into view
i just can't get over how you
bring me here and now
i'm loving the dark
around you and i

take me to
your secret land
dont leave me here
where i can't stand
let me see what hides inside
your precious heart
to which i now thrive

loving the dark
loving the dark
sweet dark
our dark
this dark
loving the dark


There... better? As for the lyrics, I sorta imagine this to be metal-like but in a melodic way... I won't name bands because there are so many out there... but this has a good flow to it which is obvious... and which is great to put music to because of this.

Anyways, hope this helps dude... and you know what would be good? If you could paste a link in your description to this song if you've recorded it and have it up somewhere... like myspace for example.

Peace,

Jase
| Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]


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