take me to your secret land dont leave me here where i can't stand let me see what hides inside your precious heart to which i now thrive
loving the dark loving the dark sweet dark our dark this dark loving the dark
There... better? As for the lyrics, I sorta imagine this to be metal-like but in a melodic way... I won't name bands because there are so many out there... but this has a good flow to it which is obvious... and which is great to put music to because of this.
Anyways, hope this helps dude... and you know what would be good? If you could paste a link in your description to this song if you've recorded it and have it up somewhere... like myspace for example.