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    dots Submission Name: My Dark Onedots
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    Author: Doom_Hammer
    ASL Info:    17/m/canada
    Elite Ratio:    1.06 - 36/41/20
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Gothic
    Total Views: 1049
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 884



    Description:
       this is jest a kinky song what can i say


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    dotsMy Dark Onedots
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    ill make u cry
    make u screem
    make u mone in pleasure

    ill make u week
    make u melt
    make u beg with disior

    you dont know
    what to do
    jest lay back and let me play with u
    yea....... MY DARK ONE

    ill make u scwerm
    make u crall
    make u siver with passion

    ill make u scrach
    make u bite
    in your kinky fight

    you dont know
    what to do
    jest lay back and let me play with u
    yea....... MY DARK ONE

    Yea ill make u week
    and ill make u wet
    and bern u with hevenly fire
    your my dark one and we'll have some and ill never put u down

    My dark one (repeat with pauses)

    My Dark One -kari villa
    :kari villa
    date:February 22, 2006, 12:01:am




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    ||| Comments |||
      I loved it I was hooked at the beginning, and it kept me hooked I loved it.

    FreeBird
    | Posted on 2006-09-30 00:00:00 | by FreeBird | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey band brother. :D

    Beyond spelling mistakes... it's good

    -- Jason Clement
    | Posted on 2006-08-07 00:00:00 | by Jason_Clement | [ Reply to This ]


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