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    dots Submission Name: love something wickeddots
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    Author: Doom_Hammer
    ASL Info:    17/m/canada
    Elite Ratio:    1.06 - 36/41/20
    Words: 263
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
    Total Views: 935
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1851



    Description:
       i wrote this for a girl long ago


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    dotslove something wickeddots
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    When I look into your eyes,
    it takes my breath away.
    And when I hear your voice,
    my body gets weak

    You're all the things
    that I want to hold close.
    You're so many things
    that I cherish most

    (b)
    There's something about you
    that lets me know that
    I'll always be happy
    there in your arms.
    My pain and hate
    was all I knew
    'till I found love in you.


    Your love's something wicked,*
    burning in my veins.
    Your love's something wicked,*
    and it makes me feel weak.
    Your love's something wicked,*
    and it takes the pain away.
    Your love's something wicked,*
    all I could ever want.

    Every night, I think of you
    and how we could be.
    Every night I dream of you,
    wishing one day they'd be true.

    When I look into your eyes,
    I see all my hopes and dreams.
    I see everything I could be.
    Your the only answer i need.

    (b)
    You show me love
    like I never knew before.
    I never thought
    I could feel this way-
    feel as if we were the only ones
    in a world of fantasy.


    Your love's something wicked,*
    burning in my veins.
    Your love's something wicked,*
    and it makes me feel weak.
    Your love's something wicked,*
    and it takes the pain away.
    Your love's something wicked,*
    all I could ever want.


    Wicked...
    Wicked...
    Your love does something wicked to me.
    Wicked to me

    love something wicked - kari villa
    : kari villa
    date:August 26, 2005, 10:40:am




    Submitted on 2006-08-07 22:30:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      All right. Here's more corrections. All technical.

    When I look into your eyes,
    it takes my breath away.
    And when I hear your voice,
    my body becomes/gets/falls weak

    You're all the things
    that I want to hold close.
    You're so many things
    that I cherish most

    (b)
    There's something about you
    that lets me know that
    I'll always be happy
    there in your arms.
    My pain and hate
    was all I knew
    'till I found love in you.


    Your love's something wicked,*
    burning in my veins.
    Your love's something wicked,*
    and it makes me feel weak.
    Your love's something wicked,*
    and it takes the pain away.
    Your love's something wicked,*
    all I could ever want.

    Every night, I think of you
    and how we could be.
    Every night I dream of you,
    wishing one day they'd be true.

    When I look into your eyes,
    I see all my hopes and dreams.
    I see everything I could be.
    Your the only answer i need.

    (b)
    You show me love
    like I never knew before.
    I never thought
    I could feel this way-
    feel as if we were the only ones
    in a world of fantasy.


    Your love's something wicked,*
    burning in my veins.
    Your love's something wicked,*
    and it makes me feel weak.
    Your love's something wicked,*
    and it takes the pain away.
    Your love's something wicked,*
    all I could ever want.


    Wicked...
    Wicked...
    Your love does something wicked to me.
    Wicked to me



    | Posted on 2008-01-17 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]
      Before I comment on this, can I see a version where all the typos are corrected and re-submitted? There is something worthwhile to comment on here, but the mistakes are distracting.
    | Posted on 2008-01-16 00:00:00 | by JenFlynn | [ Reply to This ]


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