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    dots Submission Name: A Walk Between Classesdots
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    Author: azure_warrior
    ASL Info:    42 /m/ in my mind.
    Elite Ratio:    5.43 - 44/43/32
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 1095
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 577



    Description:
       A pleasant interlude...


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    dotsA Walk Between Classesdots
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    improvisation
    flurry of dry leaves
    on the September ground.

    my thoughts lift with the wind
    propelled, falling, crunch,
    little puddles, tiny branches,
    football weather.

    Smell the lush field!
    of summer past.

    Little bits hit my face
    leaving their tiny stings.

    Half-leaves, bits flying,
    broken stems,
    acorns in muddy grass.

    Ground nuts
    that the Natives
    used to eat.

    Nature is dying,
    but I feel so alive.




    Submitted on 2006-08-07 22:42:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey,

    I was a little hesitant to comment on this piece...Mabye because i was trying to understand it in depth and thought that i missed a few parts of your piece. i don't know why it happened...i usually just go ahead with whatever is on my mind....Still i overcame it and here i am writing.

    What inspired me to read this piece was the title....i found it to be very interesting and wondered why no one would be interested in such a title. I don't know...there are many reasons for it.

    About the piece itself, to be honest the beginning had me a little confused...Maybe it's because i am not too fond of nature's description and it's true meaning. So i guess i kinda freaked out with that part...But i think i got the ending really well.

    I was thinking more about technology and our way of living right now...It's actually destroying what nature does for us...We pollute it, we exploit it, we ignore it, we do so many things to it and we don't realize it...The fact is nature is dying but we don't realize that because we feel so alive.

    Anyhow, it might just be a problem with me but i wasn't really feeling much in the beginning and i really couldn't picture much in my mind although you were descriptive. I still think it's a great piece worth reading.

    Hope all is well with you and take care...
    ~Irina
    | Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]


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