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    dots Submission Name: Everydaydots
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    Author: Kimmy
    ASL Info:    18/f/Ar
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 18/32/20
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 595
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 547



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       i havent finished this or is it finished? im not sure...cant quite start a new stanza?!?


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    dotsEverydaydots
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    This is my last request,
    To get rid of this mess
    You let me cry everyday
    And let my happiness drift away
    Tears never seem to die
    And you just keep on with the lies
    So why stay?
    When I can never have a good day?
    I just canít do it anymore
    So, Iím closing the door
    I have nothing left but sorrow
    So Iíll say hello to tomorrow
    And good-bye to the past
    Cause I canít stand to let it last
    Because if your not with me
    My whole worlds emptyÖ




    Submitted on 2006-08-08 00:07:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I tihnk that this is finished. It sounds great and is filled with great emotion. I honestly can't tihnk of much to improve this. Good job and keep writing.
    ~Caotic~
    | Posted on 2006-08-31 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]


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