Description: mmm I wrote this for an ex that I just did not desver to be with. A lot was going on in my life and dating wasn't a smart choice on my part and in the end i hurt him as I did myself and I learned so much from him I loved him. And I didnt even realize it until he left.
You See -------------------------------------------
You see my angelic smile
You see my genal eyes
You see the outside
The outside of me
And you see all this
But what you do not see,hear,or touch
Is my insides
Where I'm rotting away
Slowly but truely
Because I miss your love
Waiting here for you
My heart is telling me you'll come back
But my mind and body are saying otherwise
Which do I believe?
Which do I follow?
Do I ingore my heart
And go with what my body says?
Or do I follow my heart and wait for you..?
Which will hurt me more?
Which will hurt me less?
I want to know..
I need to know
For I can not wait much longer
This was good. I know the feeling you are talking about. You know, rotting away inside, but I know that feeling for different reasons. I've never really gotten that close to someone and gotten pain like that after losing them. But I know one of these days I will, and it's going to suck. Anyways, I've seen a lot of writes based upon the subject, but I loved the words you used. You have this way of letting people know exactly what your feeling, and again I got sucked up into your situation. Very sad, especially the ending, but nice work. Although it probably wasn't work, since this is from a true life experience. It's easy to write about your things that happen in your life. I do it all the time, and it takes so little time to write, because all I'm doing is writing down my feelings.
nice...i like i like the idea of the whole thing...so very often people look at the exterior and live their entire lives like that....they fail to see the INNER self, that what you are...what YOU have made yourself... nice... Mihir
from the way you write ignoring the mistakes and taking the person your writing about away i think mayby you feel confused to the the way people are and i feel you have reflected this in your work your close to saying what you want to/need to say but need a lil work you are good tho :) just keep putting it down the way you feel
u made sum mistakes in ur writng if u dont mind me saying it.i could get the mixed feeling coming of this. i like the the first four lines its a good way of saying that some people dont look to deep into theirs friends,bf,gf ect.