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    dots Submission Name: i'll think of one l8erdots
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    Author: chookie101
    ASL Info:    16 f australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.98 - 10/9/11
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
    Total Views: 556
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 660



    Description:
       Hey. just something random i wrote. any comment is greatly appreciated.


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    dotsi'll think of one l8erdots
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    I just wanted proof,
    just some assurance,
    that somebody's out there,
    that somebody cares.

    Their all going,
    they know i want to,
    they've got their clicks and clans,
    i have my friends.

    I thought i had my friends.

    I counted down the days
    they watched me as each number changed
    they said they'd come.
    they said we'd have some fun.

    I thought i had my friends

    They lied to me,
    thier going with others
    and now im cut
    im too many ways then one

    i thougt i had my friends.




    Submitted on 2006-08-08 07:09:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      from my terrible mind i could get alot of lonliness and betrail coming from this.its short though but i cant reali complain
    | Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by every48seconds | [ Reply to This ]


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