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    dots Submission Name: Apoligizing(edited)dots
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    Author: every48seconds
    ASL Info:    25/M/toronto
    Elite Ratio:    3.32 - 123/163/129
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    I'm sorry
    I'm sorry I ruined my life
    I'm sorry I cause you to feel like this
    I'm sorry if your crying
    I'm sorry that i didn't tell you sooner
    I'm sorry that i'm not good enough for you
    I'm sorry that i wont be there when you fall
    I'm sorry that you never knew i wanted death
    I'm sorry you never found my body with the note i left you
    I'm sorry everythings going wrong for you...that im not there to be your stepping stone again
    I'm sorry I grew up
    I'm sorry I learned about you and him
    I'm sorry....




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      very sad. the 'I'm sorry' is wot makes this piece wot it is. i like it a lot.
    whirl
    | Posted on 2006-08-11 00:00:00 | by whirl | [ Reply to This ]
      This is incrediably sad. Wow intense emotion in this. I think the "I'm Sorry" are fine as is. That is what this sytle or feel of this poem calls for. Nicely done!
    | Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by Molly Densmore | [ Reply to This ]
      Too many "I'm sorrys". Try to spread them out.
    | Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by imaginarylight6 | [ Reply to This ]


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