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    dots Submission Name: Exhausted.dots
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    Author: bluesoxz
    ASL Info:    16fohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 71/101/38
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsExhausted.dots
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    My veins Exhausted.
    Uneasy to rest.
    Can't contain the blood
    Flow.
    Can't push it through.
    My heart beats on a
    Unsteady beat.
    Somewhat slowing down.
    Somewhat speeding up.

    My skin unnourished and
    Not feed.
    Id die to kiss you.
    Id die for you to satisfy
    My thirst..
    No shame.
    No guilt.
    My bones try their best
    To hold together.

    Detached from my body
    And running wildly.
    Can't think.
    You force me to.
    I feel my Flesh begin to
    Tear.
    Hold a Cup and catch
    The blood.
    Don't want this to be
    To messy.

    Your body on top of me
    Baby this is what I Dream.
    You turn me into a
    Disease.
    Slowly but surely killing
    Me.
    Like a rape I want you
    Inside of me.
    Refuse to leave.
    Your dirty hands over me.

    My muscle tissue no
    Longer exists.
    My joints Refuse to move
    Themselves.
    And im pin under this
    Blind abuse.
    My life exhausted.





    Submitted on 2006-08-08 10:26:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This reminds my of the openning passage in a ook im reading called "a hunger like no other" Its about a vampire condemn to live and eternity of dying by being burned to death and the he submerces himself in the sent of the one he picks as his mate and rips himself from the cage rock that traps him.

    but anyways
    nice write
    | Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by chilz | [ Reply to This ]


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