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    dots Submission Name: Longlivedots
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    Author: bluesoxz
    ASL Info:    16fohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 71/101/38
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLonglivedots
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    Cut these pieces from my
    Heart.
    They have rotten away with
    The rest of my life.
    Let me die.
    Let me drag and lay along
    This confusion I have made.
    Can't say im depressed.
    Can't say if I feel anything.
    So many times I was told.
    So the story repeats.
    Nor did I listen
    Or hear the angels voice.
    Instead I had gone with
    what My flesh begged.
    To satisfy the inner feeling.

    So I wonder
    So I think.
    Why did I suffer so much
    If it was all worth the nothing.
    The thorns in my back thicken
    My hands twisted.
    And I can say this was for you.
    Or just take it as it is.
    Im done with everything.
    Longlive





    Submitted on 2006-08-08 10:30:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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