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The Black Box

Author: WriterX
ASL Info:    18/Male/Poland
Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 68 /126 /83
Words: 92
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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A short poem I wrote.... I know the topic is strange but... well we have our strange days.

The Black Box

What could be hiding
In the Black Box?
A Pandora's Curse?
A ticking bomb?

The silence is killing
The color disturbing,
What is it hiding
What is it's secret?

With no lock and hole
How can we look inside?
Discover the unknown
Be sure that it exists?

We might try with hammers
Surround it with cannons
But it will not give up,
It will stand there and wait.

With darkness inside it
We will worry and wait
For a key or a sign
To let us go inside.

Submitted on 2006-08-08 14:01:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  honestly thas kinda hot. I thot u were talkin about the black box in that dude's basement that predicts the future. So I was a lil disappointed, but i got over it quickly. I suppose there really is nothing more frightening than the unknown, and all other fear basically stems from that. I like the simplicity of lines like 'the color is disturbing.' Very basic, but it speaks volumes. I dunno, i think i must be rambling, but I really like this one.
| Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]
  Nice write. It flowed well, the word choice was simple yet effective. I liked this alot because it was original and I've never read anything like it before. I don't really have much more to say except that it was very well written and I'm adding it to my favs. Keep up the awesome work and I'll keep reading.

Sweet Blood Vampire
| Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by SweetX_XBlood | [ Reply to This ]

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