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    dots Submission Name: seeking a masterdots
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    Author: ladiesplanet1
    ASL Info:    23.cali baby
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 720/463/165
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 598
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 508



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       i wrote this when i was super dooper pooper scooper high yesterday!!! wow!!!


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    one last try
    this is my best
    i've failed in life
    but passed the rest

    i won my death
    i earned my prize
    you'll never hear
    my pleading cries

    the candles burning
    wax on my skin
    i know that i
    can never win

    honest pleasure
    lies of pain
    what is left
    that i can gain?

    cuffs now tightened
    collars in place
    seeking a master
    show me your face




    Submitted on 2006-08-08 14:38:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great rhythm, great rhymes ... a really enchanting poem for my "masochistic" Self ;)
    Life is sometimes just too freaky to be controlled by its owner... we all want ...ah... peace and "security" (from time to time at least).
    | Posted on 2006-09-27 00:00:00 | by Non-Sens-Uality | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh ok I get it. I wish. Well another great poem!
    Kelley Frost
    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by whendt | [ Reply to This ]
      Do I sense someone's inner masochist? As blackhart said, infatuation that isn't returned. It reads as angst, but still...well, I'd capitalize and punctuate.

    Mel
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by Melora | [ Reply to This ]
      this screams of unrequited love. thats the worst kind of love.. merely infatuation that isnt returned. everything rolls off the tip of the tongue, well done. what are you into anyway?...tell me more please.
    | Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by blackhart | [ Reply to This ]


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