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    dots Submission Name: Mister Mediadots
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    Author: yellow balloons
    ASL Info:    16
    Elite Ratio:    3 - 7/3/9
    Words: 187
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 509
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1371



    Description:
       a lovehate kinda relationship.


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    dotsMister Mediadots
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    Mister Media, your vicious plague
    Beneath the looks of cold dismay
    Advertising a skeletal leg
    To kill those layers stored away

    The infomercials swear, enable
    Girls in cut offs and mini skirts
    To count the microscopic labels
    While growling bellies drown in hurt

    Even after days in labor, a provoking notion:
    Giving birth with pain to soothe
    You strike the unborn's thoughts in motion
    That a mother's thighs should be butter-smooth

    Ribs and bones - designed to be seen
    Beneath that sagging extra small
    On every model's outline lean
    And figure that's the way for all

    Mister Media, why don't you just tell me
    How you profit from women's blame
    What your angle is, exactly
    Because in every direction, thin is still the same

    Multi-million dollar bathrooms built (find vomit spilt)
    Rich feminine instinct we try to hide
    It's in our blood, you've injected guilt
    An epidemic...
    Suicide.

    The cookie cutter image is too often observed
    Cheeks sucked like lemons through straws
    You arrange this on purpose (painfully served)
    A lovely display of beauty and flaws








    Submitted on 2006-08-08 17:40:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      For the most part, it flows rather well. Still, there seem to be a couple spots that seem somewhat choppy.

    Even so, I especially like the spin you put on the media. Giving it a name makes it even better.

    Superb work. I look forward for your future writings.
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by apassionatemoo | [ Reply to This ]


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