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Author: newbee
ASL Info:    15/m/toronto
Elite Ratio:    2.21 - 22 /19 /8
Words: 122
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Day by day I watch you go by
and you always see me looking from the corner of your eye.
When I see you I get a feeling thats good
and this feeling feels just like it should.
I want to walk with you hand in hand
near the lake on the sand.
I've lived for you to one day say
we can be together and stay that way.

Night by night I think of you
and hope that you think of me to.
I hope I get to be the one you love
and if that happens I'll be your dove.
I'll be your moon, your sun, your night in shinning armor
and hope that we can be together forever.




Submitted on 2006-08-08 17:59:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow i REALLY like this one i think it mite be ur best one yet. umm...i hope that eventually cant sort out ur feelings...good luck and what an awesome write
Your Friend Always
~Caotic
| Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]
  hey intarded princess


thats a good poem who is it about????

I don't think that u can improve in any way its a lot better than my poems r.


ur intarded buddy
| Posted on 2006-08-10 00:00:00 | by Amberger | [ Reply to This ]
  This is truly beautiful. Caught up in love. Hoping. Its a nice change from the drag of elite skills. i really liked this one. Usually i do not like poems that are written in couplets, but you did an amazing job. Keep up the good writting.
XoXo
me
| Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by 4ever_numb | [ Reply to This ]
  wow! that was really really good! it was really sweet but it said alot and had alot of feeling of love! nice job!
| Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by od9.1.04 | [ Reply to This ]
  What a sweet poem, I liked it. The flow of words was really nice, it gave you a...loveable feeling. It was a bit short but there's no need to worry about that. :) Well I can say, I know what you feel. I especially liked the lines:

When I see you I get a feeling that's good
and this feeling feels just like it should.

Also:

I want to walk with you hand in hand
near the lake on the sand.
I've lived for you to one day say
we can be together and stay that way.

Really good, nice job and keep writing.
| Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by Foreseer | [ Reply to This ]


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