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Author: newbee ASL Info:    15/m/toronto Elite Ratio:    2.21 - 22 /19 /8 Words: 122

Class/Type: Poetry /Love Total Views: 996 Average Vote:    No vote yet. Bytes: 662

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Day by day I watch you go by and you always see me looking from the corner of your eye. When I see you I get a feeling thats good and this feeling feels just like it should. I want to walk with you hand in hand near the lake on the sand. I've lived for you to one day say we can be together and stay that way. Night by night I think of you and hope that you think of me to. I hope I get to be the one you love and if that happens I'll be your dove. I'll be your moon, your sun, your night in shinning armor and hope that we can be together forever.

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wow i REALLY like this one i think it mite be ur best one yet. umm...i hope that eventually cant sort out ur feelings...good luck and what an awesome write Your Friend Always ~Caotic

| Posted on 2006-08-14 00:00:00 | by Caotic_Disaster | [ Reply to This ]

hey intarded princess thats a good poem who is it about???? I don't think that u can improve in any way its a lot better than my poems r. ur intarded buddy

| Posted on 2006-08-10 00:00:00 | by Amberger | [ Reply to This ]

This is truly beautiful. Caught up in love. Hoping. Its a nice change from the drag of elite skills. i really liked this one. Usually i do not like poems that are written in couplets, but you did an amazing job. Keep up the good writting. XoXo me

| Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by 4ever_numb | [ Reply to This ]

wow! that was really really good! it was really sweet but it said alot and had alot of feeling of love! nice job!

| Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by od9.1.04 | [ Reply to This ]

What a sweet poem, I liked it. The flow of words was really nice, it gave you a...loveable feeling. It was a bit short but there's no need to worry about that. :) Well I can say, I know what you feel. I especially liked the lines: When I see you I get a feeling that's good and this feeling feels just like it should. Also: I want to walk with you hand in hand near the lake on the sand. I've lived for you to one day say we can be together and stay that way. Really good, nice job and keep writing.

| Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by Foreseer | [ Reply to This ]

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