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    dots Submission Name: Ghazal 1dots
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    Author: azure_warrior
    ASL Info:    42 /m/ in my mind.
    Elite Ratio:    5.43 - 44/43/32
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 791
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 502



    Description:
       I'm just trying to learn the form. I would really appreciate if someone who has experience with it could write.
    Thanks.


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    dotsGhazal 1dots
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    I.
    Tell me what it is you really want.
    Burning with lies that I don't really want.

    II.
    Living joy and leisure, alone with my thoughts,
    After awhile, there is nothing to really want.

    III.
    You are gone, my life you will haunt.
    All our past with me you really want.


    IV.
    Ecstastic union, no more, you looked so gaunt.
    Complete fullfillment is finally what you really want.





    Submitted on 2006-08-08 18:51:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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