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Author: MidnightMelody
ASL Info:    18/f/US
Elite Ratio:    2.95 - 44 /52 /55
Words: 29
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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i'm not done wiht this. and i'm extremely hyper.. maybe when i'm more calm i'm fix it up and write some more


I am speechless
these words will not form
at these lips
that have said so many things
that I wished they hadn't...

but they had.

Submitted on 2006-08-08 20:00:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Cool poem, you turned an everyday thought (for me) into a hard hitting little poem,ill look out for your poems in the future,keep writing!

| Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by Dead Bell | [ Reply to This ]
  i really feel this one... i have said a lot of things I didn't mean and it tortures me, i lost so much because of it. good idea... take care, shalini
| Posted on 2006-08-08 00:00:00 | by sbridges | [ Reply to This ]

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