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    dots Submission Name: Daddys Little Girldots

    Author: unnatainable
    ASL Info:    20/F/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    3.07 - 48/42/23
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 738
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 754

       its kinda about a guy and having a broken heart and wen u get the courage to give it out again it gets hurt.. again...

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    dotsDaddys Little Girldots

    shes daddy's little girl
    but she gone far to wrong
    her head is hanging low today
    while she cries her dreams away
    salty pain stains her pretty dress
    as the cars drive by
    take her home and make her smile
    she too ashamed to say he hurt her
    lying awake its 2am
    her heart beats faster
    keeping in time with her favourite song
    but shes gone far too wrong
    she'd give her heart away
    for just another cheap thrill
    that maybe shes not alone
    if he doesnt notice noone ever will
    she cannot stay here
    fixating on words she could say
    to take his breath away
    but he wont return to hold her
    and daddy is long gone

    Submitted on 2006-08-08 20:05:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is good, I really did like the whole point behind it. Just a suggestion though, you should space it every two lines, to make it a little easier to read. Amazing yet again though, keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2006-08-16 00:00:00 | by Fadeintoreality | [ Reply to This ]

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