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    dots Submission Name: My Destinydots
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    Author: mysterious one
    ASL Info:    24/f/in my head
    Elite Ratio:    3.61 - 58/57/17
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 701
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 656



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       I wrote this a few years ago.


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    dotsMy Destinydots
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    Every day I fight to stay happy.

    Others may not see, but deep inside it's killing me.

    The depression that comes so easily.

    It's like a plague, my weight and my sympathy.

    I don't know how to fight it, so I let it devour me.

    Yet I never ask for help because of my pride and dignity.

    They may put me away in some penitentiary.

    It scares me, I want to stay healthy.

    Could someone please help me?

    Again, no one hears my cry or plee.

    I'm starting to think it's just my destiny.




    Submitted on 2006-08-08 21:43:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yea, that poem is extremely good exellence but i fell that it is misses alittle somthing, i feel that it's missing the heart and soul of its divinity With alittle more talent and time spent into this poem it could be a masterful piece of art . when it comes to these sort of these things it can be used into a career to be well known acrossas the world of poems so with time in the future I really hope to read some of these poems becuase under it all i see that your an exellent writer. But you also need to put it in poetry form to let the reader know right off the bat that it is a poem and it gives it it's beutiful looks So keep up the good work and I hope to read more of these poems in the future.

    ~Lance~
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by red passion | [ Reply to This ]
      I can relate much...Yeah, maybe it's just one's destiny...An honest and simple write.

    God bless.
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by raineces | [ Reply to This ]
      hey. this poem is really relatable. i really like it.

    kayla
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by chookie101 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow what a deep poem. Loved how you kept it all in perfect rhyme. The agony of whoever this piece was about is very well detected. It saddens me to read how someone can believe that depression is their destiny. The picture you painted is crystal clear with the words you chose. Good job on this write.
    | Posted on 2006-08-19 00:00:00 | by gigglebox24 | [ Reply to This ]


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