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    dots Submission Name: Eyes of the Moondots
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    Author: Lareth
    ASL Info:    20/M/KY
    Elite Ratio:    5.07 - 101/134/43
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Prose/
    Total Views: 305
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 946



    Description:
       This may seem like one of those kids poems that you would read in a kindergarden class... but I really do have a meaning behind it... See if you can find it. ... and I also challenge you to find out who the "author" of this story is...


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    dotsEyes of the Moondots
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    I will finish editing this later, I am not finished, but I have to go.
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    Such a lovely thing... the moon.
    I wonder what it would be like to live there and look at the earth at night.
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    Oh! How I wish I could see what the moon sees, looking upon the cosmos of eternity.

    Brother Mars and sister Venus, can you share with me, what the moon sees?

    You can't? You wont? But why sister? Why brother? Why is this a secret to me?

    I wish to look upon the endless sea. Why brother is this a secret to me?

    I am not strong enough to hide this secret you say?

    Please, I beg you... tell me today.

    Why is this such a puzzle to me? Sister, are you keeping it a secret too?

    Please, tell me. I beg of you.




    Submitted on 2006-08-08 21:50:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      oh i like this
    | Posted on 2006-09-25 00:00:00 | by dark lover | [ Reply to This ]
      For some reason, this reminds me of 'A Midsummernights Dream'. Something out of a fairytale, or story, something that is a favorite to a little girl before bed...every night.....then falling asleep only to dream of dancing on the moonbeams.

    Yes, I was one of those little girls once, my poor mother had to read me the same story every night before bed, and sometimes even make up her own because I just loved the fairytale fare...lol.

    I think you should write childrens books....I would certainly think they would be best sellers.

    Thanks for bringing me back to a childhood fantasy dream....


    Sorrel
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by SorrelsReality | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, It's very creative and makes you feel the frustration your feeling at the time. It's very good and creative.
    | Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by Babykatty | [ Reply to This ]



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