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    dots Submission Name: Fairy in the Woodsdots

    Author: yellow balloons
    ASL Info:    16
    Elite Ratio:    3 - 7/3/9
    Words: 478
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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       for my prettyface rie*

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    dotsFairy in the Woodsdots

    Who is this girl who illuminates
    Never hesitates
    To make a statement
    She walks the streets with bright eyes
    And always seems to get it right
    Shes so beautifully simple, but still craving for
    Shes a pretty face, but so much more
    And sometimes when Im on my back
    On a bed of broken grass
    Waiting for the madness to pass
    My head on dirt and body on Earth
    Ill think about how shell never know
    Just what shes really worth
    Who is this girl who radiates
    She penetrates
    This sensitive piece of me I never knew existed
    I find myself in a teenage bonfire of extremes
    Breaking wild vs. breaking expectation
    I need to keep her
    I love to free her
    Shes so damn capable
    But is she stable?
    She lights and passes, inhales deeply
    Holds it and pauses, feels the freedom deep within
    Where has she been? (that keeps her strong)
    Keeps her smiling while the the clouds go on pumping
    Who is this girl who barely makes but
    She elevates
    To pass the peak shes just only passed
    She takes me down the only road
    Id never take on my own
    And I close my eyes from walls as bright
    As yellow sunshine that fills up the night
    This tiny square has family feel
    Serving pancakes and a side of smiles for every meal
    And she sits with a hood and a mug full of steam
    Shes so full of hope
    And so destined to dream
    Though shes small (she carries herself)
    So damn well
    Who is this girl who contemplates but
    She celebrates
    Just sitting back and living life
    Yet shes a fairy stuck deep in the woods
    And when I paint I try to save her
    Through words and colors and endless strings
    Of lyrics and poems and magical things
    That I hope will find her, like fireflies that flutter
    Through wind that allows her to follow the map
    Of toy cars on a track
    The longest road ever taken
    Just tiny dots shooting, like stars in a constellation
    Shes escaping
    And Im right by her side
    Who is this girl, this pretty face
    She never waits
    But [after she's gone] you find yourself pondering
    Who is this fairy
    Who has sugar and salt and chocolate as base?
    Her bones are of lyrics
    And heart pumps pure honey
    Her veins are the wires that truly allow me
    To feel every moment positively
    Shes just like my prettybaby, my beautiful Lacey
    Who felt solely responsible
    To hold the weight of the world on her shoulder
    But the hold got too heavy
    And I can't risk the possibility
    I'll save at any cost
    To see another pretty face lost
    So run, little dreamer, bypass the stars til you find

    ...Im always just a footstep behind*

    Submitted on 2006-08-09 02:16:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow...just...wow. I thought it was fantastic. I liked how the words seemed to flow all in one breath. Makes it feel all the more powerful, I think. I love this!
    | Posted on 2006-08-10 00:00:00 | by Mookyvet | [ Reply to This ]

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