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    dots Submission Name: just make it go awaydots

    Author: supergirl_in_oh
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    dotsjust make it go awaydots

    The pain inside is to much to bare.
    So i'm finnaly going to take a dare and tear away from this miserable place cuz i'm daddy's little discrace.

    Submitted on 2006-08-09 02:42:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You're dady's disgrace? Oh my golly gosh! lol, Daddy would never disgrace you, he loves us, lol.
    Well, this sounded a bit more like the ending to a good poem, except the whole 'the pain inside' stuff, but it would all depend on the body of the entire poem. Try adding more to this, and make this the ending to whatever you come up with, as long as it fits, lol.
    Peace sis.

    | Posted on 2006-08-11 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      not your best, but it gets the point across
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]

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