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    dots Submission Name: Twilightdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 23
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTwilightdots
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    Over drunk and overtired
    I embrace this sleepy twilight
    whether it be
    between waking and sleep
    or life and death.






    Submitted on 2004-05-19 05:05:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i liked this the only thing i really didnt like was the 1st line,over drunk, i think that there could be a better word used for that, but im not sure what. everything else was wonderful
    | Posted on 2004-05-19 00:00:00 | by gigglygirl | [ Reply to This ]
      Well written but I am not sure if you are commenting on a nights sleep or a lifelong situation. Perhaps you intended it to be a bit ambiguous? Perhaps I am a bit over-thick!
    | Posted on 2004-05-19 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      great poem about insomnia. I'm glad I could finally sleep well tonight after a few days. you've described the feelings very vivid. I think only drunk would have been a little too weak. I like it very much as it is. well done.
    | Posted on 2004-05-19 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      You've not been getting as much sleep as you'd like lately, have you?

    Over-drunk works... poetry doesn't have to be Queen's English, it just has to be well done. This could be an anthem for insomniacs.. they don't CARE if they never wake up, just as long as they can fall asleep!
    | Posted on 2004-05-19 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      wow! this is SO what im feeling, what im ready to do... i have been awake for 6 nights now and they just gave me sleeping meds and i am PRAYING they give me a break from reality tonight. i love the first two lines... overdrunk over tired... thats so the feeling well and the last two are great too... who cares what your sleeping between so long as your sleeping... good luck with that! ciao!
    | Posted on 2004-05-19 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Whew, yeah I've been there...one too many times...tonight probably too. A very common practice in the life of an alcoholic, unfortunately, I don't care enough whether I live or die to write about it.

    -MyX
    | Posted on 2004-05-20 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]


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