great poem about insomnia. I'm glad I could finally sleep well tonight after a few days. you've described the feelings very vivid. I think only drunk would have been a little too weak. I like it very much as it is. well done.
You've not been getting as much sleep as you'd like lately, have you?
Over-drunk works... poetry doesn't have to be Queen's English, it just has to be well done. This could be an anthem for insomniacs.. they don't CARE if they never wake up, just as long as they can fall asleep!
wow! this is SO what im feeling, what im ready to do... i have been awake for 6 nights now and they just gave me sleeping meds and i am PRAYING they give me a break from reality tonight. i love the first two lines... overdrunk over tired... thats so the feeling well and the last two are great too... who cares what your sleeping between so long as your sleeping... good luck with that! ciao!