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    dots Submission Name: I Don't Think You'd Caredots
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    Author: Toxic Rose
    Elite Ratio:    5.82 - 159/220/97
    Words: 290
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    Description:
       I hope he reads this.
    ...Fat chance. It was a load off my mind, anyways.


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    dotsI Don't Think You'd Caredots
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    I'm standing here
    With broken promises
    Tied up inside me
    I'm waiting here
    Thinking of what you said
    And I know you were lying
    Lying..
    Lying...

    If I were to scream
    Baby would you hear me?
    If I was to shout in pain
    When I'm running lost in the rain
    If I were to scream
    I don't think you'd hear me
    I don't think you'd care.

    You once told me
    That I wasn't good enough
    Have I proved you wrong yet?
    You once believed
    That you had led me to see
    It'd be better if we'd never met

    If I were to scream
    Baby would you hear me?
    If I was to shout in pain
    When I'm running lost in the rain
    If I were to scream
    I don't think you'd hear me
    I don't think you'd care.

    I tried so hard and fell so far
    Even wished upon a shooting star
    But in the end, I got what was best
    And I stood my ground- have I passed the test?!

    If I were to scream
    Baby would you hear me?
    If I was to shout in pain
    When I'm running lost in the rain
    If I were to scream
    I don't think you'd hear me
    I don't think you'd care.

    I can't hold it back inside
    You broke my soul, and I know you tried
    To capture me in your misery
    But it didn't work, 'cause now I'm free

    If I were to scream
    Baby would you hear me?
    If I was to shout in pain
    When I'm running lost in the rain
    If I were to scream
    I don't think you'd hear me
    I don't think you'd care.





    Submitted on 2006-08-09 11:07:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This seems pretty song-like with a bit of fixing up. It's definitely a rant! I did that so much... I'd get home and just turn out poem after poem just because I had so much to get out... now I guess I am a bit more guarded with my rants and feverish postings... although I'm not saying it's a bad thing.

    "When I'm running lost in the rain"

    after I read this line, I instantly had this wondering imagery... this girl maniacly running, lost in the rain, screaming, her hair drenched in rain and tears, the rain swirling greens and blues around her...

    okay, so I got a little carried away but still.

    Peace, LucyDiamond
    | Posted on 2006-10-15 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]


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