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    dots Submission Name: Your Suicidedots
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    Author: 4ever_numb
    ASL Info:    17/f/cali
    Elite Ratio:    3.91 - 6/6/6
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dotsYour Suicidedots
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    The pain is overflowing,

    As the gun drops,

    I hope you went knowing,

    It made my world stop.

    The thought of this destroys me,

    Wishing it not to be true,

    But I just hate to see,

    How the truth can be so cruel.

    Even as time has passed,

    The pain does not go numb,

    I want it to be over fast,

    But my body wont play dumb.

    Wishing to know that you are safe,

    And watching over me,

    Hoping to somehow see your face,

    But It will never be.




    Submitted on 2006-08-09 13:23:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow i think this is a good write, its emotional and kinda remids me of myself...
    very good write

    Bella
    | Posted on 2007-09-07 00:00:00 | by IsabellaAurora | [ Reply to This ]
      It seems someone close to you committed suicide, a close friend or family member, am I right? Nice write though, i enjoyed reading it. Not the whole suicide part you know, cause that is just so sadd.

    Peace,
    Jay.

    | Posted on 2006-08-11 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]


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