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    dots Submission Name: Aspiration #4dots
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    Author: Syndl
    ASL Info:    28/F/NC
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 56/55/19
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Prose/Nostalgia
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    Description:
       This was a creative game someone started in another community a while back. I thought I would turn it into a poem but prose seems to suit it better. Any thoughts?


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    dotsAspiration #4dots
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    To be but a dream in the mind of a child. Romping through imagined notions and realms, ever twisting and changing to both the delight and the horror of the mind. Darkness flittering to golden sunshine at whim, a lollipop, a snake, an old and weathered oak in the midst of a field or the cottony clouds atop a blue veined sky. To know that my actions, visions and whispered promises will be forever remembered or instantly forgotten in the newly risen day. To be but a dream in the mind of a child.




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