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    dots Submission Name: Todaydots
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    Author: bluesoxz
    ASL Info:    16fohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 71/101/38
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Today I made the choice
    To cry a new Tear.
    Dripping off my salty skin.
    Don't you miss this voice.
    Don't you miss this reaction.

    Today I made the choice
    To hold it all in.
    To not explain to you why
    I feel incomplete.
    Slowly I shut myself out.
    Sonly I start to talk to
    Myself again..

    Today I made the choice
    To not yell and scream.
    But to soak and observe
    Your pity.
    To question why God made
    Paradise like this.

    God.... I hate the way you
    Stare.
    Break Snap and Fold.
    You do those things to me.
    Rip Cut Die
    You make me feel like this
    Way..

    Today I made the choice To
    Make myself numb.
    To become As dead as possible
    While living..
    To make my heart beat as slow
    As possible before dying.
    No longer seduced.
    Today No longer exists




    Submitted on 2006-08-09 15:10:41     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really deep and interesting
    One thing I am not sure of in this write is are you speaking to someone when you say God or is it God himself you are speaking to
    That is the only part I find a little confusing in this write
    God Bless
    Ron

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    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]


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