days go by

Author: od9.1.04 ASL Info:    15/f/oh Elite Ratio:    1.68 - 18 /38 /19 Words: 47

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days go by

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days go by when you won't leave my mind days go slowly when you aren't there to hold me days go too fast when we're together time only will pass days go sweetly when I'm in your arms where you keep me.

Submitted on 2006-08-09 15:29:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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This is a beautiful poem. It was short, but it told so much. I'm not one to read love poems, but this one was so good, I just had to comment and tell you. Piper

| Posted on 2006-08-10 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]

this was well written but on the second paragraph thing u forgot to put an "s" at the end of the word day. and yea very good job keep it up. -Nick-

| Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by newbee | [ Reply to This ]

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