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    dots Submission Name: Abduction, Obsessiondots
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    Author: darkeveris
    ASL Info:    19/F/Someplace silent
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 34/62/38
    Words: 319
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsAbduction, Obsessiondots
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    Shall I stand above you mistress,
    And lick apart your breast.
    Light prisms through broken glass,
    Laying still on you're subordinates flesh.

    I want to be yours,
    I want to share you with no one.
    Let me claw apart the wet skin,
    Till you're muscles have none.

    I will give to you pleasure,
    Kill anyone keeping you from me.
    Let me wrap around you,
    The sheets of ecstasy.

    And moan to me the sweet sounds,
    Of you're raptured body's song.
    Let me slip my fingers gently in,
    And travel where they belong.

    I will follow your street of loneliness,
    Enter the forbidden temple of sin.
    Then cut apart you're love for man,
    I will not have them win.

    When you refuse I shall topple you,
    And cut out you're pulsing heart.
    I'll distroy the one thing,
    That keeps you and I my love apart.

    I wish to have you forever,
    Even if to have is to have died.
    I will even kill myself,
    To have you at my side.

    All I wish is to have you dominate me,
    Use me and hurt me as you please.
    Just what ever you do take me,
    And stop being my disease.

    I don't care if its infactuaton,
    If there's nothing to gain.
    All I want is to feel needed,
    Or at least feel real pain.

    Deny me no more,
    Desolate my body.
    Or I will take that step,
    And throw a slicing party.

    I will take you're blood in a glass,
    And pour it on myself.
    Shower me with part of you,
    And take my embodiment onto a shelf.




    Submitted on 2006-08-09 18:08:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow this is hott and gothic at the same time, i love it. it gets me chills and reminds me of alot of scary things..pain with pleasure, pleasure with pain.

    And moan to me the sweet sounds,
    Of you're raptured body's song.
    Let me slip my fingers gently in,
    And travel where they belong.

    i really enjoyed that part lol that was just fu*ckin sexy *Ah

    i loved all the other parts xcept when you wrote *fuc*king*. that didnt belong there as i say to the rest, curse words dont fit in poems. it kills the beauty of the poem.

    beautiful overall! its a favorite
    | Posted on 2007-01-06 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]
      iiii really liked this one....it was beauifully written...and i could feel the sensuality in it....i loved it....definitely one of my favs

    <3
    | Posted on 2006-08-09 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]


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